Any feedback is much appreciated!
I tried to pour as much work into this as I could so I could upload a draft and revise as much as possible. Typography is something I’ve always struggled with, so anything anyone can give me is great! I’m more than willing to revise any design and try out whatever’s suggested! Thank you guys!
COMD250 Fall 2019 
They all look really good! You really got inventive with some of these too which is cool. My personal favorites are from the third panel: the second one on the top row and the last one on the top row. The one at the end of the first row (third panel) is great because it gets a little literal: it’s like a spotlight shining making the word ‘visible’.
I have a couple critiques though, feel free to tell me if there’s more to it than I can see. In the third panel right in the center, that tile is slightly weird to me because it looks like a giant U or a weird X (or a cup?). That makes it slightly weird to read easily on its own. And the other thing is in the fourth panel, second row, second column: the gradient one. I think that the difference in color should be a little more distinct as its almost invisible in the background, as in maybe making the difference in values more distinct for that one. It’s a really cool concept just a little hard to read because of how little value difference there is.
That’s all really. You worked pretty hard on these and it shows! Awesome stuff Molly π
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Thank you so much! I’m really glad you appreciate them! I’ll definitely try to mess with those two designs you mentioned! Again, thank you so much for your feedback! π
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Your designs are amazing! My favorites are the fourth page: first row last one. The “THINKING” & “VISIBLE” are so cool, they made the whole box looks like horror movie poster. And the first row first one the bubbles are very cute!
I think the third page fourth row last one the “Visible” the design of the “V”, it looks like a “D” or an upside-down “C” to me. I feel like it will be better to remove the upper curve line of the “V”. The third page third row second one, the graphic (not sure is there any meaning of it) in the middle it looks kind of weird to me, I know they are the “i” but they are too eyes catching, it makes me looks at the graphic first, then the “design”, “make” and “visible”, last the “Design is”.
Looking all of your designs have surprised me, most them are really good and I really like them!
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Aw, thank you! π I’ll definitely work with your feedback and try my best to rework those designs! It’s really helpful getting these other opinions, so thank you!!
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Always getting inspired and shook by your work, Molly! These look great.
I love the 5th box, 1st row, on page 3. In my opinion, it looks and feels really simply but also conveys the message really effectively. I also really appreciate the 3rd box, 1st row, on page 4, because of the linear illustration and how well the type fits in it. Love that!
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Thank you so much! I’m really glad you like those designs! ππ I tried my best with this whole Illustrator thing, I didn’t really know how to use it besides some of the basic tools. π
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I’m gonna start off will some small crits
3 page, 3rd panel down: The words thinking and visible are slightly lost in the border and if able without ruining the nice theme you have going on with it maybe move them slightly to the right so that it’s a bit more visible.
3rd page, last panel: There’s a straight-ish line within the V design (where all the naturistic design is) that could be curved a bit more to allow better flow in the letter. Also, the e gets a little lost in made, possibly making it slightly bigger or downsizing the d a little might help.
-4th page, 2nd over in the last row: Reminds me of a children’s book, the only thing thing that really breaks that for me is that the thickness of the letters seem a bit too big or the lines of the drawing are too small, either way, it might help the design I think.
I personally really enjoy the 3rd page, 2nd panel to the right, it flows very nicely with the font mixed with design leading to the name. A lot of these designs are quite illustrative and whimsical. I look forward to seeing more of your work π
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Thank you so much for your feedback, it’s insanely helpful~! I’ll definitely try and make a few changes to the designs you mentioned~! π
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